Valhalla

Your narrator's voice is too removed from the situation. It would be better to have the scenes narrated as they happened. There should also be more urgency. Thinking about a ...

A breakup poem with an attempt to turn it around at the end. The turnaround didn't really work. It sounds self-absorbed and over-confident. You say you have a knack for ...

A poem about writing. How original. Well, it's not that bad, actually. I agree with your choice of no caps. I think you might want to watch your religious overtones ...

The meter isn't bad. I'll admit that. It fits. But it's sing songy and do you really want a sad poem to be sing songy? To get stuck in your ...

That was exciting. But there are some things that need adjustment. I have a younger cousin that has selective mutism. She never treats it as a game, and I didn't ...

The murder at the beginning was surprising because I thought that the mc was talking about singing at first. I was going to mention the passive voice, but windrattlestheblinds has ...

I like how pretty your words are, but I don't really understand what is going on at all. Imagery isn't enough to carry a poem. Find more of a meaning ...

I like the emotional part of this, where the girl is talking like everything is great. I think you should switch the italicized parts. It is hard to read italics ...

I like this. I would like to know what are on the necklaces that are making people whisper about them. I wear a pagan symbol around my neck and in ...