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Re: 1
That is good I would just work on more description and less conversations... Otherwise it was really good!
Jun 3, 2014 -
Re: Fading Fairytales - Chapter Six (II)
I literally have nothing to say. Great descriptions and just the right amount of talking. Great job!
Jun 2, 2014 -
Re: Infinite Oblivion: Chapter 1
Thank you for the feed back, sorry that it was so long... I understand the syntax part, I really DO need to work on that... I called Infinite Oblivion because ...
Jun 2, 2014 -
Re: Witchtales
The only thing i would change is where it says ,"in curls and darker eyes to match" i would change it to,"in curls, and darker eyes to match" Minor mistake, ...
Jun 2, 2014 -
Re: The Monster in Your Closet
Wait I am a little confused with this, is this a horror story because it's really scary. I love the last sentence, it's so mysterious and weird in a good ...
Jun 2, 2014 -
Re: Imbalance
This is amazing, I literally have nothing bad to say! All the words fit perfectly, and it's just beautiful!Do more of this, it's so good! I Great job, you have ...
Jun 1, 2014 -
Re: Sound
If this was a book, it would be the next Ms. Peregrins home for Peculiar Children! This sounds great!
Jun 1, 2014 -
Re: Hatshepsut: the Forgotten Pharaoh (Chapter 3)
It's great! I would just suggest one thing, you should describe the surroundings more so the reader understands what exactly they are looking at. Otherwise, this looks awesome! Keep up ...
Jun 1, 2014 -
Re: Hatshepsut: the Forgotten Pharaoh (Chapter 3)
It's great! Keep up the good work!
Jun 1, 2014