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Thank you both!! I have forgotten how old Kit is and was wondering how she is able to disguise her voice as well as she does, especially in any yelling ...

:D I think I like this chapter best, I'm not sure why. There were other things to see to . To = too? Laroo’s face turned bright read with embarrassment. ...

Hitchhiker's Guide To The Galaxy! :roll: :lol:

I didn't read the bit before this! Shock and horror! Without a word Tannar stepped forward, splaying his long, blue fingers around the wound he had inflicted. His large, glowing ...

Chapter 6: All Flesh Is Grass Sherringford was able to sit up without too much pain the next day, and he had eaten his breakfast with a show of good ...

No, not rape... What father would rape their child? You'd be surprised at how many do just that. Look on the BBC website sometime. Sad, but true. But how can ...

Hillarious! ... and I know that's not helpful. But it was! You LIKED Eragon? Seriously? Without sarcasm? That much?

Very amusing! ^_^ Till got all the stuff that I didn't even notice. It was amusing and well written, but who is the other person you're writing with?

I think I liked this draft better. It flows better, and it's less "emo-teen" -ish. ^_~ You're missing some punctuation, but I have no idea how punctuation works in poetry, ...

Rofl! Wonderful! I once wrote a piece like this for a Randomness Contest, but this was funnier!! Spiderman, Cap'n Jack... LOL!!!

Is this Non Fiction or a Book Review?

Good, but I didn't quite get the last stanza. Maybe that's because I'm stupid. :razz:

Ditto what everyone else has said, especially about critting other stuff first. But this was very good! I wasn't expecting the ending. And sad too, how the girl didn't get ...

LOL!! I really like this poem. :lol: Funny, and a good original idea. ^_^

I didn't see anything wrong with this - 'tis very good! :D You're going to use this in real life? Hope it goes well.