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Hai! Firstly try to refrain from swearing outside of literary works. And by “try to refrain from”, I mean don’t do it. :P Although I did like this – it ...

Hai! Okay, this was weird. :mrgreen: I don't know what the rules for writing this was, but it would help if you made this so it's understandable for an outsider ...

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Hai! Whispers and other sounds surrounded her. The crackling of fire, shrieking, and my own heavy breathing. It might be better if you combined these two sentences, as when I ...

Hai! I didn't like this that much, but that's because of the subject, not your writing. However, it is kind of that. Rape is such a terrible thing -- it's ...

Hai! Twit here, emerging from years of hibernation to finally crit something. Be flattered. Be very flattered. :mrgreen: Dakota 1 – White Winter I’m not sure why you have this ...

Dude, this is so incredibly long that I’m going to have to split it in two as I might not get a chance to finish it all. Can you post ...

Hai! When I arrived back to the room, the doctor was there with some not-so-pleasant news . “Not-so-pleasant news” is really casual and flippant. I haven’t read the first part, ...

This is a complete and utter work of awesomeness. The "stream of consciousness" style in which this was written was perfectly handled and fitted really well with the subject and ...

Hai! :mrgreen: So far , the facade has held; the feeble-minded humans have yet to see my true intentions. I’m not sure whether you need that first comma, but I ...

Hai! I have to say, this didn't really grab my interest. For starters, the accent really, really, really annoyed me. If she’s writing it, she wouldn’t write words the way ...

Hai! I see that this is your first post, so welcome to YWS! It’s part of the Rules that a member must submit at least two reviews (helpful and considerate) ...

First, please consider who is giving you the gift? You don’t need that question mark, make the sentence a command. WARNING//: This is very important, if the person giving you ...

Hai! I don't think I quite "got" this. It sounded really pretty, and it was very well wriiten and nicely descriptive, but I don't get what it is that you're ...

I always knew I was different, just how different never hit me until now. Worst beginning line ever. Sorry, but it is. It’s clichéd, cheesy and boring and tell-y. However, ...