Tropicana

Wow, this is quite the piece. Amazing. I could literally feel my pulse jump when Punnett pulled free the gun. Very morbid, very interesting, I liked it. I would have ...

Hello Kyrstalstars! Being a HP lover I really was excited to see another 'Harry Potter' fanfictino on here, but I began to read and I noticed you have many, many ...

Hi! I really did like this poem and with theluckyflower's suggestions I'd like it even more. Good luck! Brad- I noticed your comments on other peoples poems and I'm so ...

Hello! I wasn't a huge fan of this poem. Honestly it sounded like after the first eight lines you just wanted to finish and just put things in at random. ...

I don't mean to be discouraging especially when your new to the site... but honestly, what was this? I was reminded of some overdone [cheesy] musical. Also, rhyming. You don't ...

Hello again! I actually did like where you broke it up. It's edging on choppy in some places though and I think you might want to insert some commas. Also ...

Whoah. I have to say that I am really, really impressed. Like LOST (Emily) said at first I didn't notice that it was reversed in the second stanza and thought ...

I really loved this one. When you read aloud it sounds so cool. fallen from the heights of serenity into a nightmare of addictive obsession how you separated serenity and ...

It's weird seeing nothing but shades of grey and just wishing that there would be florescent greens in my death-time. I really like these few lines. It sounds really cool ...

Great poem! I really enjoyed this! One issue I have is these two lines: worry not, sand is more precious than stars. Huh? I'm confused... Where did the stars reference ...

Wow, I really loved this. It's probably one of the best I've read on here! I'm a kitten on your patchwork quilt in the house that jack kerouac built. I ...

Hi! I read it and it was pretty good. But like Snoink said there was something... missing. It was like you told us what was happening but it was detached. ...

Very nice actually. I'm surprised this got to the third page *frowns* I would think that you'd probably want this a little longer, have a bridge, maybe a third verse ...

Hey Mary!!! I really love the rewrite. That was funny before... (Ground... around... ground...) This is really better (does that make sense grammatically?) but I have one itty bitty problem: ...

I have to say that I totally disagree with the opinions above. I thought it was a perfect length. (But I'm used to updates that are around 3 thousand words) ...