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No, it doesn't sound forced, but I don't think it needs to be in brackets (or did you just do it to highlight what part you were talking about?). Although ...

I prefer the second one, I think. It gets the point across a bit more subtly and it does sound like something someone would say. :-)

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I did wonder if maybe that was intentional. :-)

Thank you so much! You're very kind. :-)

No worries, I enjoyed reading it, and the fact that there was so little for me to point out showed that you had done some really good editing. Good luck ...

Hi again :-) I just thought to mention that if you wanted to find a good diary entry style novel to model format and such off, the book A Brief ...

Thank you

Gosh, thank you! And you advice helps a lot. :-)

Thank you! I'll definitely take all your advice into consideration! :-)

Thank you!! I'm so glad you liked it! :-)

No worries - I really did enjoy it.

Thanks! I've gone through and fixed the typos. I can't believe I wrote heartache like that... No idea where that came from. :-)

No worries. Glad to help! :-)

No worries. Glad I could help. :-)