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Me again! Once again, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I don't know if it's my favourite chapter so far, but your writing is awesome and basically everything that's been said ...

Hi! Sorry it's taken me so long to get around to reviewing this, life's been a little crazy! I think Lucrezia and Magenta have picked up all of the grammar ...

Hey Kanome, here as requested! I don't really know what to say about this... it's random, but it makes sense and it was a lot of fun to read. It's ...

Hi there! Here to review as requested! I love the premise this story is built upon. It seems really original, and you've already shown some great worldbuilding. This is a ...

Hi there Scoeri! Here to review as promised! I really enjoyed this second chapter, and your new title is much more captivating. I reckon this was a great improvement on ...

Hi there! Okay, so I reckon this chapter was stacks better than chapter one, which was already awesome. By the time I'd reached the middle of the chapter, I had ...

Hi Alex! Here to review as requested! :-) This was a really interesting piece, and there's already some excellent world building present. This chapter does an excellent job of setting ...

Hi there! Here to review as requested. :-) This piece was really well-written. Your pacing was fantastic, and you had an ideal number of events occuring for a first chapter. ...

Hi there! This is a great first chapter, and I feel as though it was a massive improvement on the prologue, which was already very good. Firstly, I'd like to ...

Hi there! This piece was pretty awesome, and despite (like AEChronicle) being a little dubious about the Barney factor, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Even this early on, I thought ...

Hi there! This is a very good piece, and I enjoyed reading it. I second a lot if the sentiments that the others have said, so I thought I'd just ...

Hi there! I really like the idea behind this piece, and I think it could develop into a really interesting story. I think your pacing has pretty good, although the ...

Hi there! This was a really good piece. The style of writing wasn't quite my cup of tea, however, this piece was so well written that this didn't particularly matter. ...

Hi there! You've done an excellent job on this, and I really hope you submit it into that competition, because it is very well-written and you could do very well. ...

Hi there! I thought that this story was very interesting, and the plot was really good, although I might have wanted to get to know the characters a little better. ...