TreeHugger12

Oh my! Could it really be another chappie?? Yes, yes it is. Yehey!!! I really liked this chappie. Especially the parts where Crys was (intentionally) pissing Ben off. That was ...

Oh my goodness. That was so totally awesome!!! It kept me hooked. It made me ignore everything else I was doing. You are one talented young writer my dear. I ...

you've got a punctuation mistake, but other than that, it's fine. I really like this poem. It says a lot. There were a few parts where your rhythm was a ...

My, I really liked this poem. It's got a sort of 'demented- but-well-meaning' feel to it. I liked it. And specially that part about raindrops. Everyone can think of reasons ...

I found it funny. hmm... perhaps amusing is a more suitable word for it. I didn't expect that last line, and it leaves us wondering, "what pick- up line could ...

Well, I "liked" it. Like what almost everyone else has said, you need more depth with your characters. Explain why they do what they do. Doing two perspectives ought to ...

Haha, I can't believe I actually cracked it. XD It took me about 45 minutes to... Anyways, I like your haiku. Its short, but covers the important stuff and tells ...

I love it! But um, who's Celie? Anyways, the grammar is okay (thought I think you should've put it at the start). It's quite touching and sweet. I really felt ...

Ooh! So cool! loved it. It was so funny. But there was a part that didn't quite seem right. Nicholas said these lines. I assume you're trying to make his ...

I dunno. It's just so cool. Most poems bore me by the sixth line but yours, well, it was something special. It drew me in. The wording was wonderful but ...

Can't do a real review cause we've got school tomorrow so all I'm going to say is, great work! Love the poem. The transition from safety and comfort to the ...

Argh! The others have already done the nitpicking for me. Maybe I should check in more often... :/ Anyway, I loved this chapter! Especially the part about CJ and Crys... ...

Ooh.. Loved this chappy!!! I like the bubble scene because, as stated before, you made it easy to visualize. And I also like the fact that she makes sense, she's ...

Ooh, I like it!!! My Gooshneck! I couldn't stop reading it! I absolutely love it! I noticed something though... "His formally tanned skin..." shouldn't this be formerly tanned? I'm not ...

Oooh! I love it! Great stuff! I really like the story and the way you write. Reminds me of the CSI episode I watched last night, the guy killed himself ...