ToritheMonster

Hehe, I love Phantom. Thanks a bunch! I'll work on it.

Hehehe thanks. Yeah... well, it's sort of supposed to sound a bit like rape... my whole story's creepy like that. Thanks so much. I'm off to make some changes now! ...

Holy awesome! Beautiful work. I love how you put fiddlesticks at the end. That was silly.

Haha thanks. Sorry, originally every word was misspelled. Day was spelled dsy, pink was spelled pnk.... you get the idea. Sorry I didn't catch them all. O-o

Thanks!

Thanks, Skins and Elinor. Haha, yeah, my asleep self has some issues with adjectives and...making sense in general.Just about every word was misspelled before I put it on here, too, ...

Thank you!

Thanks, you guys.

I hate to argue but free verse is with no punctuation. If you just forget to punctuate it's called: just forgetting to punctuate.

Hey Kara! Thanks for the review! Yeah, this isn't my best work, and I know it's a little (okay fine. A lot) smooshed together and non-entertaining at the end. But ...

Thanks for the reviews, everyone!

*cries* Why wasn't I in a corner humming a VPM maniacally to myself? Just kidding. This was funny. Nice one.

Okay, I'm back again, this time for a real review: Alright, so I'm not going to bother with nitpicks, everybody else has covred those. I'll start with you beginning- In ...

The only way this could be improved apon is if I were in it. XD

Thanks!