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Hidden

Hidden is my life

Who I am, what I am is hidden.

To hide is to be safe.

To be safe is to be secure.

To be secure is to be happy.

Happy is the best way to live life.

The only way to live life

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ToritheMonster
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I hate to argue but free verse is with no punctuation. If you just forget to punctuate it's called: just forgetting to punctuate.

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screamandshout
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i love it and the person above me is wrong, its called free verse

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CreativeFreak
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Hi, call me Freak or Fry, if you will. :)
Nitpicks!

This whole poem has problems with punctuation; you need some commas here and there, and in some places you need a period. For example:

Hidden
Hidden is my life...
The only way to live life
Hidden

After the first "Hidden" you should place a period there, and then for the end "Hidden" there should be either a comma or semicolon before it.

I like the comparisons, but some of them don't make some sense, so maybe ask a friend if those comparisons make sense or sound good over all.

Good job though, and keep writing-get some reviews in there two! :D

~ PM me for help or questions. :)



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