Torigirl15

I like this! It's funny, but not in an outright way. I only had a few corrections. :) On that holy second I decided that I would never become a ...

I like your style of writing! One thing I was wondering about is how Tallor could be so annoyed that he wasn't going to be king when he's only 14. ...

This has a lot of potential, but you really need to clean it up. I'm not even going to list all the grammatical errors, it would just take too long. ...

Hey! Tori here for a review! ^^ Okay, first off, I absolutely love the Maximum Ride series, and I'm really excited that you decided to do a fan fiction about ...

Back again! You asked for me to point out all the typos, so here goes! New York City, It had been Don't capitalize "it" moved faster but he wa put ...

Hi! I'm back for more! =p Now, i hope you'll excuse me, but I'm going to quote your entire script in here in order to make sure i edit the ...

Hi! Here to critique! =p Well, a lot of people have already caught most of the mistakes, but i'll see if i find anything else.... mmm.... The bell rings and ...

Oh, i loved this! it was amazing! A couple paragraphs though you need to work on flow, but other than that i liked it! pm when you write more. Also, ...

I liked this story, and i want to know what's going happen next! i'm not really into spiderman, but my brother is, and he would eat this story up. =p ...

i liked this, but i have to say that the way you described Eric is a little... done before. What i mean by that is, it seems like he's your ...

Never mind, i take back the part of my other review where i said i didn't know how your mc woke up. =) One thing i would change is the ...

i really liked your idea and where you're taking the story. one of my problems was that i didn't understand exactly when the mc woke up from the dream. It ...

i think you have a really good idea going. here are a few grammatical errors you had... they didn't tell is that it Did you intend to put "they didn't ...

I really liked this writing, but the beginning was very confusing. i couldn't understand who was who, and what half the things they were talking about meant, so maybe try ...

I loved this! The descriptions of the characters are amazing, and the play was hilarious! The ending made me laugh, although, i don't understand exactly how "Daisy" get's out of ...