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Hey uriah! I really appreciate the review. I'm glad you enjoyed this small piece, and I hope you stick around while I attempt to lengthen it. I'm also enjoying how ...

Thanks Izzy! I will take this into proofreading and for the next chapter. PS: Remember to post me when anything else of yours comes up. I'm following you but, sometimes ...

Thanks Kay, a first review is always hard (I just did mine yesterday). You did well though :D I will work on more detailed action scenes :)

Looks like I didn't proofread this, ha ha. So character descriptions #1 besides grammar/ spell-check?

Thanks Lycan, this review will be kept on hand when I go to write the next chapter (You said it was the end of the story, it's just the end ...

This is a very remarkable piece of writing. (This is more of a comment) I was really pulled in from the first piece. I really would like to se more ...

Okay. I will work this week on trying to fix most of those things. Also, if you were to grade this (where it sits now) as a Fantasy story what ...

Thanks for the review. Will really take this into consideration. Haven't really worked much with fantasy, so let's see where this goes. Also, you said I shouldn't end my story ...

OOpppps.......... Let's try this Hey there! So far, it's very attention getting. But, with every story, there's some issues. #1 (and the most important for me because I cringe whenever ...

Like JohnLocke said (Hehe I love Lost), this seems like the very basic, world in disaster, zombie attack. But this AKS seems like it could change the story dramatically. A ...

I did not read this whole thing at all. (Way to much to take in) I just read a little bit here and there but, this is what I got: ...

I did not read this whole thing at all. (Way to much to take in) I just read a little bit here and there but, this is what I got: ...

Like JohnLocke said (Hehe I love Lost), this seems like the very basic, world in disaster, zombie attack. But this AKS seems like it could change the story dramatically. A ...