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Re: Flight 764-Chapter 1
This piece kept you hanging. First, the fact that he was unlucky even though he won the lottery. Then, he gets mugged, and it doesn't really faze him, except for ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Her Unlucky Cup of Coffee
Hey! I really liked it. I think it would be great if you made it into a novel, and the fight scene after sounds good too. One nitpick though: [quote] ...
May 16, 2011 -
Re: Tesseract - Chapter 7
It kept me hooked. i want to know how this is happening, why, and If she will find out her true identity. Her are a few things i spotted. Reluctantly ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Sons of Mars
I really liked it. You captured the readers attention because they don't know whats going on in the beginning. On that note, the beginning confused me a bit but you ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Finding Perfection.
I love it! It is such a good chapter! I only noticed a couple of things. It was still such a shook to her, such a surprise. Instead of the ...
May 3, 2011 -
Re: The Unwanted ( Chapter one )
Hey Lilybean! I love your story so far. You really capture the way Violet feels, and describe her. I can't wait to read more! :D :) ;) -Titan
Apr 23, 2011 -
Re: Alexandra Chapter 2
Hey! This part of the story kindof was confuzing. I noticed one spelling error. Being the nosey mermaid that I am%u2026Ok! Ok! So I%u2019m nosey !- It should be spelled ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Tesseract - Chapter 4
A great chapter! Mysterious. Exciting. I only saw one typo. It exited me, The word should be spelled excited. Overall, I really liked it. The plot is very exciting and ...
Apr 3, 2011 -
Re: Tesseract - Chapter 3
Hello! I really liked this chapter. although, it was a little confusing when they started fighting. i wouldn't recommend a he said/ she said thing though, so I don't know ...
Apr 3, 2011 -
Re: When I Fell Pregnant [April]
Hey Bug Bug! I'm sorry that it has taken me so long to review this. It is a great addition to the story. I noticed a couple of things though. ...
Apr 2, 2011 -
Re: When I Fell Pregnant [March]
Hey! I love this book! I only found two things. Okay, I wasn’t going to call the cops, but I was tempted too. the too would be to. I mean, ...
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: Student Militia: Underground (Prologue)
I'm guessing this is the second novel to the secret pack of hellwolves- which I just finished reading and think you should post- so it really dragged me in. I ...
Mar 10, 2011 -
Re: Patience chapter 2
Hey! It's me again! The first part of the chapter confused me, with the little girl. Ialso noticed a few things. I was suddenly snapped out of my relaxed state, ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: Patience chapter 1
Hey! I have no idea how much of the stuff I am going to say was already covered by anyone else, but I am going to say it anyway. “Aren’t ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: When I Fell Pregnant [February]
Hey! Again, I really like your writing! Only noticed one thing that bugged me. I did feel bad that I said no to his party now. It might just be ...
Mar 2, 2011