TimmyJake

For having Writer's block, you can sure write well! :P Everything rhymes superrrr well. Each other one rhymes, right? The only thing that I can see are a few commas, ...

Your first Poem? Really? My first one sounded so stupid I was red in the face when my parents read it. Rip it apart? What an invitation! :P timmyjake here, ...

I like the poem a lot! Some poems don't really make sense, and you can't really tell what the author is implying. With yours, you know what it is... But ...

I think I agree with BenToomey. Your chapter should stay with one character, and then if you switch characters, you should make the prophets part longer and more descript. Grandma ...