TimmyJake

Timmy here fro a quick review!!! Nitpicks first, like usualll.... I did try. I pulled my thin shirt tighter around myself and curled into a smaller ball, wondering where she ...

Timmy here for a review!! Nitpicks first. I didn’t speak Chinese but it didn’t take me long to figure it out. A comma after "Chinese" People gazed around with lost ...

Timmy here for a review! Nitpicks, first. But still, I shut myself away from the rest of the team, without telling any of them why. Try to eliminate commas in ...

Timmy here for a review! Sheesh, why am I always the last one? Not fair. :'( Nitpicks , first Mystique hadn't responded well when Kurt had been the one to ...

Timmy here for a review!! Nitpicks , first! Omg where r u? class is starting soon... you better get here! This is all text language, correct? Welllll... make it all ...

Timmy here for a review!! Nitpicks , first.[/b] Oh my god! Millie! ---Replace the first exclamation mark with a comma, I think. Ow geez calm down ---That dialogue seems rough ...

Timmy here for a review!! Nitpicks I scanned those lying on the ground that were moaning and wailing for help. I looked over the blood and bones. I didn’t have ...

Timmy here for a review!! Nitpicks first!! and it kept falling; ---You don't have punctuation throughout your poem, save for in the first line of each stanza, and then you ...

Timmy here for a review!! I've always told you that I love the sun ---This line is the only line in the entire poem that is in the past tense.... ...

Timmy here for a quick review!! I know I am supposed to be reviewing something ellllse... but I couldn't resist. :) Nitpicks first! Isn’t it funny what water, herbs, milk ...

Timmy here for a quick review!! Nitpicks first, as usual... For him, the open day had indeed opened a Pandora's box. ---for me, the two bolded words sound a tad ...

Timmy here for a review, as promised. ;) Nitpicks first. Jumping at my own shadow, I--- That part insinuates that he/she--not sure which, yet--is afraid. And yet you don't go ...

Timmy here for a short review! Nitpicks first, like usual!! I am going off of the tiniest nitpicks, because there is really nothing to nitpick here. Perfect to begin with? ...

Timmy here for another review... Nitpicks “It’s reindeer milk!” he chuckled. --The exclamation mark implies that he exclaimed it.... And then he chuckled, which doesn't really go with it very ...

Timmy here for a quick review!! No nitpicks on this one. Nu-uh. There is no reason for any. This is perfect. :) Embrace hollow shells; Is this a reference to ...