Tigersprite

Thanks everybody for the constructive criticism. I think one of the main problems I've had is the fact that I've been writing for myself for so long; I haven't been ...

This is amusing, but I've seen it online before. As it isn't your work, this would be best placed in the Lounge as a joke, but not your own literary ...

I think I'll add a small note at the top of the story, just to clear-up this misunderstanding. :( But anyway, thanks for the reviews, people.

Just to be clear: this is not the Christian God I am referring to. I am a Christian, and I'm not trying to offend anybody. Creator is referred to as ...

Thanks for all the comments guys, but now I'm going to lock this because it's pretty old. ;)

@ballerina13 Thanks for the input, yes it is based on the Pocahontas song. I've added some commas and a few question marks to make it easier to read now. @Pink ...

Thanks for all the helpful reviews guys. Now I've got some important feedback: try and make the sentences less choppy and more descriptive, and try to make sure I don't ...

Thanks for your review guys! :D I'm trying to correct the things you pointed out. I've also realized from Flow's review that I seem to mix up genders. When I'm ...

The essay is strong and passionate, and the fact that you are a teenager saying this gives it a valid presence. If anything, maybe you can add another more popular ...

Thanks for all the reviews guys! :D I'm trying to implement some of your comments and ideas now. I will win this competition yet! :p

@ leebass It is quite depressing isn't it? Actually this is the most depressing thing I've written. It was going to have a happy ending at first, but then I ...

Thanks for the reviews guys! At first I wondered what you meant about the MC thing, then I read it through and realized what you meant. The problem is that ...

The three of the top of my head are: The Alchemist by Paulo Coelho, The Famished Road by Ben Okri and the Tales of the Otori series by Lian Hearn/ ...

Thanks for all the helpful comments guys! :D If anyone's interested, Kiss of Death now has a page at: Please join if you will! :D TIGERSPRITE

Shouldn't this be in the poem area?