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----------------------------- II Nightmare The hail hurled everything as far as I could see. Did you mean: 'The hail was coming down everywhere.' And isn't the hail hurting our MC? The ...

...This has never happened to me before. I went through this, I scoured every word and sentence, and the only mistake I could come up with was this: I chose ...

Hi! Okay, so this is my first contest entry for YWS. You can find the contest details here: So, here it is! This is actually meant to be read in ...

A cool wind floated through the open window, rustling the gossamer curtains. Elspeth Devereaux shivered and looked up from the book she was reading. The moonlight fell across her bed ...

Tiger here to review for the contest! You've got a lot of reviews, but I'll find a nit to pick anyway! :wink: Comments shall be in bold . Whatever doubts ...

Tiger here to review for the contest! Comments shall be in bold . This is for the Magic Realism contest! I whistled slightly you can't whistle slightly. Perhaps you meant ...

Tiger here, now reviewing all the contest entries before I make a decision. Comments shall be in bold . The thud of hoof beats was loud around them, comma not ...

Tiger here to review! Your story was recommended on the Under-appreciated Works by Fellow YWSers page which you may find here: Comments will be in bold . Erik Levers, 14 ...

Okay, so this is my first piece in like...months. On top of that it's rather rushed, so I'm kind of scared that it's really horrible. Heh. Anyway, the inspiration came ...

Scarlet petals leaked from her skin, danced I think dancing might go better here between torn pores to the cruel world above, . rose perfume Switching these words around might ...

This is awesome! :smt003 Pink's given you one, but I'll still give you another penguin!

'Kay, Tiger back to review. It took me a while to find this Part 2. But now I have and I'll give you another review! :D There was a long ...

I agree with you. As emoinpunk said though, it's the graphic sex scenes that are bad (like perhaps in Sugar Rush; one scene was sort of graphic). The ones were ...

We're all just six feet under, shut away from the world. Are Our secret's no comma needed here are sins and we should be ashamed. Yet, we all walked forward, ...

First of all--and this was the main reason I came to review this--the title should be: A Possible Prologue for a Book I Am Writing . And with that covered, ...