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Re: Another Story From My Average Life: Chapter one- Picture Day
I LOVED this! First off, I think your story really captures the average life (Hence the title) of an average teenage girl. Three thumps up for that! :) Second: I ...
Sep 2, 2012 -
Re: Star Wars: The Path of Kaiden: Chapter 1: Beginnings
This is sooo excellent! I LOVE Star Wars! First off, I believe the "F" of the Force is supposed to be capitalized. I think it's pretty much the Jedis' God. ...
Aug 30, 2012 -
Re: Upon Your Love
This is great! First, you didn't have TOO many grammar issues. Just the simple and understandable mistake of when the main character refers to himself (It is a dude, right? ...
Aug 30, 2012 -
Re: On An Old Dirt Road - Chapter 1
Wow, Payne! Sooo interesting so far! The last sentence/paragraph thingie is TOTALLY making me wish to read more! I like the part that goes "Her hair, once thick and black ...
Aug 30, 2012 -
Re: Slap
All I can say is: WOW. In a good way- Great way, actually! I absolutely LOVED this chapter. :)
Aug 30, 2012 -
Re: You Liar
First off, interesting writing style. I'm not sure if I like it or not, but it's obviously gripping. Second, I gotta admit: It got me from the beginning. I liked ...
Aug 30, 2012 -
Re: Flashback
Oh, my Gosh! That is an AMAZING beginning! Great story, so far! Can't wait to read more. Is that an actual song?
Aug 30, 2012 -
Re: The end of Nicole Pedeare- Prolouge
Wow, Makenna! The beginning so far is SUPER powerful! It gripped me from the start! I love the end: "This book isn’t just the end of me- this book is ...
Aug 29, 2012