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  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, General Re: Element Prologue

    This story seems almost fantastical. I'm surprised you put it in the "teen fiction" section! It's a good start for a novel that has a lot of potential, so keep ...

    Jul 28, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: Mysterious Things

    I had that "Oh snap" moment when her aunt couldn't see who was on the bed. If it's only the beginning of the story, it's already very captivating and I ...

    Jul 28, 2013
  • Poetry » Humor, General Re: Problems While Writing

    This poem is extremely accurate. I like how you use repetition with the word "until" and its synonyms, it's a solid, followable pattern. There is a lack of punctuation. It's ...

    Jul 28, 2013
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Naturmalina

    This story had me hooked-- it was fascinating. Your characters were compelling and it was full of action and adventure. However, the whole storyline was rather unclear. The wheelchair thing ...

    Jul 27, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: lethargy

    This is my first review, so please bare with me. :) I can relate to feeling bored and not being able to escape. Your word choice was careful and excellent ...

    Jul 26, 2013


"The trouble with Borrowing another mind was, you always felt out of place when you got back to your own body, and Granny was the first person ever to read the mind of a building. Now she was feeling big and gritty and full of passages. 'Are you all right?' Granny nodded, and opened her windows. She extended her east and west wings and tried to concentrate on the tiny cup held in her pillars."
— Terry Pratchett, Discworld: Equal Rites