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Re: The Communication
Hi! First, this is really good! I was immediately drawn by Kurt and Lilly and the sudden appearance of the man in the suit made me even more curious. Your ...
Feb 20, 2020 -
Re: Ripening Scars
Hi! This is a really interesting concept and a great start to a story. I love that you added in how important the hair color is to the tribe. It ...
Nov 24, 2019 -
Re: The God of War
This is a really well written story. I really enjoyed how you wrote who the true god of war was. Also THANK YOU for having the General cut her forearm ...
Nov 14, 2019 -
Re: Trust me, not? (Part 5)
Hi! First let me just say that I'm hooked. This story draws you in and I gotta know more. There are only two little things that I could nitpick. The ...
Nov 12, 2019 -
Re: Red Wine
This gave me chills. Full body, skipping down my arms chills. Holy fork dude. The suspense build was great, you started out low and slowly built it up to the ...
Nov 12, 2019 -
Re: Liv Elyse ~ Want to get feedback on the opening/prologue.
This is a great start! You have really sturdy bones here and with a little more meat added you'd have a very compelling beginning to a story. The only thing ...
Nov 12, 2019