TheNextBigThing

:| Please don't be offended, but this story could be better. There are absolutely no descreption -or anything for that matter- besides dialogue. It gets really old. It just her ...

I didn't get it :?. It was really confusing, but I think I was figuring it out by the end. Still though, you should clear it up, and make it ...

Short and sweet. I like it. It's definitely a good start, and it makes me want to read more. I don’t have much to critique on this story… Few things ...

Not big on twilight (but i can't wait for the New Moon movie to come out [Jacob Fan]), but when I saw 'Bella's 30th Birthday', it seemed like something interesting ...

I have to say, this was a bit confusing :? . I liked it, but you need to clear things up. Like who are the Mutants? Be a bit more ...

:smt038 I absolutely loved it, and there isn't much to critique on it. One thing I would do, though, is put a little bit more description in your story. It ...