TheEnigma

This was so intense, I couldn't stop reading it. Your first sentence was great; it hooked me right away. And I also liked your implied what was going to happen ...

Wow, I really liked this. It was one of those pieces that you just can't stop reading. Just a couple things I noticed: It slammed shut behind her, but she ...

Haha, I like your characters. They are just great, especially Markus. And (it looks to me) you've set up your plot really well. I've just got a couple of recommendations ...

Are you going to continue this? It seems like you've got a whole other story to reveal, like this paragraph is just leading up into something else that happens--a negative ...

I was kind of confused on this one. I didn't get a lot of what they were talking about. What was the daydream about at the beginning? It was a ...

I'm curious to know what the original ending to this was. I like this. I feel you could expand it more, of course--maybe add on to the action, make it ...

Very sweet marriage scene. I think you could make the accident scene a little more dramatic, though. Also, in expressing Ashley's death: maybe find a different way to tell than ...

Ah, I liked this novel. I think it's a really good idea and you should definitely continue it. First off, I noticed some run-ons and a few things that need ...

Wow, this was awesome. One of the things sought for in poetry is imagery, and you had a lot of great imagery. You did a great job using it to ...

I don't know much about scripts, but I can say, I liked this quite a bit. I could see the characters in my head like it was actually a movie. ...

Ha, I liked your beginning and end a lot! You had me hooked from the start and kept the action moving really well. It's like this piece is pretty much ...

Very vivid writing and interesting descriptions. I did notice a couple of errors: or an immaculate lown. Did you mean "lawn" here? The y aren't yellow with joy It's pretty ...

Your grammar and vocab was pretty good overall, and your writing flows nicely. You seem to be one of those writers who can put a great deal in a paragraph ...

Wow. That's the first thing I've got to say. My second is: good job. It can be tricky to build a story through dialogue, and in this case the reader ...

Haha, this is great. And what's funny is, it actually sounds like an eight-year-old is telling the story. I mean, the main character, not the author. If you get what ...