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Re: the striker project a book in the works
Negatives: A cool story, although one thing did confuse me: A forth one stitched the baby up and then handed him off to the man near the slime and he ...
Jan 18, 2009 -
Re: Stepping Into Static [Edited]
This is amazing, and I only found one typo: “Is that all?” I gasped, leaning back in my chair to breathe a sigh of relief. So it wasn’t her teachers, ...
Jan 18, 2009 -
Re: Split personalities 0.1
Hey, asxz! I think this was very well written, in fact beautifully, although a few questions DID come to mind: ~What was he a captive of? ~Who were the men? ...
Jan 18, 2009 -
Re: First Kiss, edit
I really enjoyed this except for one part: I feel his hand brush my cheek, I feel him coming closer, his nose grazing mine as he tilts his head to ...
Jan 18, 2009 -
Re: Faded Moons; Chapter 1 - P1
Positives I found how you described the sights in paragraph one and smells in paragraph three were really well done! I loved Roberts sense of humor, and it interested me ...
Jan 18, 2009
