Tessia

With no desire to make you feel bad, your poem isn't very good... However, I have decided to help you and I've played around with it. I've used your main ...

It's pretty good. First of all, remember your punctuation! I've played around with your poem to add a bit more of flow. Tell me what you think; The morning sun ...

Nice! I really enjoyed it. There's one main thing to correct; punctuation! Remember to add your commas, periods, and if needed exclamation and question marks. I'd also like to add ...

It's not bad. I found it pretty intense but it doesn't completely captivate the reader. As Squallz said, your poem is rather a rewrite of many ideas that already exist. ...

It's a rather entretaining story. Please do check your spelling mistakes and be sure to add more adjectives, for you need more descriptive manners in your story. As for the ...

Lol... well... It is definately good, but it gets a little too mixed up. However, I insist, it's pretty good and since it was your first poem, I'd joyfully rate ...

Funny. Yes, definately funny. I think good short poems are the best ones, for they tend to capture your attention better. Your poem is captivating and nice, but I feel ...

Great! It is very sad and deep. And as Snoink mentioned, let your beautiful poem flow and don't worry about making it rhyme. And remember, the world is full of ...

It's quite good, although I'd say that you need more adjectives. For example, you start by writing: "What you need to know is that most of the time, I’m a ...