Tenyo

Review three! I like this chapter, but the events didn't really seem to flow together all that well. So far one of the interesting things about your writing is those ...

Awesome! :D The hook was instant, and the opening created a brilliantly sinister atmosphere. As a first chapter it works really well, and the plot is quite gripping. I understood ...

Review two point two! I love the twist! The story just got ten times more exciting. The build up however has a few things that don't really fit together. Does ...

Review Part 2 :) Again, this is another reason to have an introduction chapter, just something to show what life is usually like. Especially for Josiah's sake. Think of it ...

Hey Pink! I'm here to review your novel :D Starting with Chapter one. As an opening chapter it seems a little daunting. The language is lovely, and I like the ...

Review 6.2 Nooo that can't be the last part! *Sigh* I guess it can't be helped. Maxxie is a pervert now? Haha, that made me laugh so hard. In all ...

It's sunny outside :) Which puts me in a good mood, but it also means my head is a little frazzled so I apologise if any of this doesn't make ...

Review five :) I'm starting to like the humour in this. At first I got the impression that Maxxie was quite simple, but now he's starting to seem incredibly sarcastic. ...

Lmao! “You look like you’ve been sucking on a blooming lemon!” That has to be the most brilliantly inappropriate thing you can say at a funeral. Haha, I love it! ...

Review Three :) Wow. In Chapter 2 part 2 I mentioned that you didn't fully take advantage of the whole grief situation, but I'd say here you've done it perfectly. ...

Review 2.2 In all honesty I liked chapter two without the second part. This part seems much, much better written than the last two. That was right up until "Gritting ...

Review part two! There's a teacher called miss cheddar? Haha! I love it. "I hadn’t done anything wrong. I couldn’t think of anything anyway." This is a really nice touch ...

Hey Skins :D Time to review your novel. To start, I think this is amazing as a first chapter. The hook is instant, you've created a good sense of character ...

Review(9) News casts: that's the articles the news people read or write. News casters: they're the people who find out the news. "I love you daddy?" Haha! I love that ...

Review Part(8) The glitchmonster ate my review, so if this seems a little rushed it's because I'm typing it for the second time :p I have to agree with Razzle ...