TearsOnYourFace

There are a few followers to the first poem; here's the next. Confusion, Runs around my head, Holds me hostage, Won't give up the Relentless stream of different dreams Like ...

Really like this. The poem has a great, upbeat rhythm that comes out in reading it out loud. Uplifting, short and sweet. I like! :D

Hey, thanks for commenting! Yeh, the no punctuaion thing seems a bit wierd at first, but it's to highlight the rushed, frantic feelings of the narrator. Glad you enjoyed it!

Gorgeous, Flit, I utterly love this. The use of the colours, and the elaborate yet simple descriptions means it plays out in my head as a short film. Definitely a ...

Hey, I really liked this. In fact, this is a useless post, I don't have any crits. Just wanted to say that I thought you'd captured the mood of this ...