Teardrop_on_the_fire

Firstly, if Velton is a warewolf then take that first paragraph out, put it into the story in a different way, what she did on a cancelled period or something, ...

Ok, I must admit the part you added was funny. (you get a reluctant star from me)

May I ask before I review if the name Arc comes from Arcanum ?

Grr, I'm sorry but I can't laugh or think it's funny. It only annoyed me really. It's takes the serious quality about the Twilight series I love. But for others ...

That was sad, tragic, almost disgusting in parts, and totally outstanding in my book.

What time period is this supposed to be set in, exactly? I was thinking modern era, but they seem to be employing archaic technology (sundials, quills, etc.) Is there are ...

I was a little lost until the end. I understand it now, but you might consider putting more of what you talked about at the end into the middle part?

For me it was sort of strange, but I liked it very much. For a title...maybe something like "Playing Heart Strings", "Heart's Song", something like that(?)

The flow of it was a tad choppy for me, but I liked it very much as it went on because; one, I LOVE writing, two, I love creepy analogies ...

Ooh, very nice. The year that I was so looking forward to, mutated into a fight for my life and for the life of others around me, and I found ...

A fun new way to sing to the old German tune. I like how you took an already existing tune and changed the words to give the still same happy ...

Again, I'm going to cry. I only have praise for the song, I loved it and I could see her moaning next to an empty bottle, sad and depressed. It ...

Tell me if it was real enough