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by Teardrop_on_the_fire

  • Short Story
  • Fantasy

Published January 7, 2009

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Teardrop_on_the_fire commented Comment · Jan 7, 2009

Quibbons Quill wrote:Firstly, if Velton is a warewolf then take that first paragraph out, put it into the story in a different way, what she did on a cancelled period or something, also work dubbly hard to get away from the HP thing as Lupin,a nice prof was also a warewolf, if he's not then good misdirection
Thats all really liked the last line and by the looks of it the next section will liven up the story


Lol, he's not werewolf. :P I promise

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Quibbons Quill wrote a review Review · Jan 7, 2009

Firstly, if Velton is a warewolf then take that first paragraph out, put it into the story in a different way, what she did on a cancelled period or something, also work dubbly hard to get away from the HP thing as Lupin,a nice prof was also a warewolf, if he's not then good misdirection
Thats all really liked the last line and by the looks of it the next section will liven up the story



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