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Hey!! I've already talked to you about the start, and the setting, so I don't need to go there. The second half... Bickazer had alot of good points, most of ...

Nice!! I loved it, and even though I didn't think I was quite in the mood for gore and blood etc, I found it highly entertaining. The almost bored tone ...

Hey. Well overall I think it's alot better, I agree that it flows alot easier, at least after the first part. However that first part is too disjointed. Some breaks ...

Hey Mat. wow, that really was spur of the moment wasn't it? I'm not going to say I'm onued though, because I think you have managed to answer most of ...

Hey Mat! This is really good. you said you were doing this mainly for characterisation, well you've done that quite well. You've managed to create a good idea of what ...

I absolutely adore the Phantom of the opera. this is an intereting take on the Phantom's persona, as i always thought of him as being a very suave and austere. ...

Hey!! I love this. you've created great imagery here, and it difinitely makes me think. The whole simile is great, the personification, metaphor, whatever you like to call it. The ...

You're right it is really abstract, but it's still a good read. I agree with basically everything that's already been said, and there's not much that I can add on ...

I hate echoing other peoples comments because it just makes me seem like a copier, but this is a very interesting read. So many things are happening here, and so ...

Interesting. Very nice to read, you've got the emotions portrayed well and that has helped me to enjoy it. Again, you have a beautiful writing style, that is wonderful read. ...

This is beautiful to read. It has a rythm, and wonderful feeling about it that really makes you smile, and think. Yes, there are a few typos that have already ...

Wow! you have some really powerful message here, and you've portrayed them so well! you've addressed some of the most important topics of today's society in such a strong and ...

Woah! This is powerful! That's my first impression anyway, and I'm pretty sure that's what you were aiming for, so...Woah! Well done. The stucture of the paragraphs has really helped ...

A lovely analogy, very descriptive, I never thought that silverwear could have so much emotion and affect! This is really great to read, very nice. I loved it! I can't ...

This is very good, and I loved reading it. But there are a few things that I want to point out that need to be changed. Standing still, wondering if ...