Talulahbelle

Okay, um... just a few points. Firstly, how old is this kid? Three? He strikes me as way too articulate and understanding for a three year old. It really pulled ...

Overall I thought this was really interesting. I want to know whats going on here! The only thing I thought to comment on was the end - the action-y part. ...

Dude! I loved this! Your writing style is really interesting and easy to read, while still getting all the goods like emotion and sturff. The footnotes worked great, by the ...

Awesome! Another great chapter, Orinette! I still say that you could've put all that back story into a conversation or even have Kael pondering over it after he's banished - ...

OH, this was so grood! I'm so drawn into this story! I want to know what they need the baby for - what the "Sixth Sense" is - everything! What's ...

hey! Overall this was great idea! Very original and interesting. But there's something lacking. First, I think that maybe you would feel better with it if you took the characters ...

Hey! Overall I thought this was really good. It's got an interesting story line and characters - I only have one thing. I feel that you told us too much ...

Okay, it looks like Lumi has been really thorough, so I'll be quick and vague, if you don't mind. One thing that gets me is my lack of connection. Your ...

Hey there! Ummm.... this is very hard for me to review. I feel like there is something about it that I can't put my finger on. On reading that English ...

Hey there! I thought this was excellent! It was really dark and stuff, but super entertaining. There were a few parts - just phrasing and such - that could've clearer, ...

Hey there! I don't have much to say about this (sorry for my worthless review!), but everyone has pretty much covered the major points. Umm... I will say that you ...

Hey there! Since so many people have been here and given such thorough reviews, I'm only going to add one more thing. Sometimes, your words fall kind of awkwardly - ...

Oh RachaelElg! I love it! I devoured it! Your writing style is so clever, so personal without that sloppiness I've seen sometimes when people (like me) try to pull off ...

Okay, just a few things. First - when you have a lot of dialogue, try to mix it up a bit. See how when you look over the block of ...

I enjoyed this, but something about it didn't quite sit right with me. I think everything went a little too smoothly for Loren and Seraphina, not one noticed he was ...