Talking_Pinata

Wow. Thumbs up. You've got me hooked. Grammar mistakes have seemingly been taken care of. Thumbs up again, I actually was drawn in a read the whole thing, which is ...

As I said in my above post, some awkwardness, and I'll point those out to you as well as other grammatical mistakes. 1. You don't need to repost the title, ...

Thankyou! I'll be looking into that >_> . Just gotta figure out HOW to do so.

Thankyou! Don't forget to look for grammer mistakes! They're very helpful X3

By what you think I mean: 1. Did it catch your attention? 2. How is the character development going, however short 3. Other thoughts. THANKYOU AGAIN AND SORRY FOR BUMPING!

Aw.........................*sniffle* That was deep. Only one thing to pick about. The punctuation on (at LEAST) the last line of a stanza should be a period. Aw....

I think its a good idea, but I agree with the others as well: it is a little rough. Read it aloud to yourself and you'll know some things that ...

So sorry for bumping it. DX I'm unsatisfied with these reviews considering I edited it.

GAH. HUGE mistake here guys. NUMERO UNO: I forgot to add in something that'd help you know that the police officer didn't kill Iliad! DX He was handed back to ...

Thankyou for the comment! I'm VERY happy for the kind compliments!

MOSTLY, I'm looking for grammatical errors as well as emotions. The emotions I (tried to) convey are: -Horror at the camp -Hopelessness, or sadness as Iliad dies. Please comment!~

Thankyou! I appreciate the praise. And yes, I've found myself wishing the same thing every once in awhile.

Thankyou everyone and I will be contemplating the beginnning of it in deeeeep thoughts.

Thankyou for the reviews! I appreciate all the praise more than you can imagine!

Wow. Thankyou!