Tabithalillian

Thanks for the awesome review! Really really helpful and motivating. I'll work on beefing up Jacobs character!

Oh my goodness you are wonderful! Lengthy reviews are the best the hep me improve the most! Thanks so much!

Thanks very much! That gives me drive to keep writing this. I am so sorry about the paragraphs I've tried to fix it, i'm like a grandmother when it comes ...

Oh thank you so much, i've tried to fix that issue. I thought I had fixed it when I submitted but I guess I didn't save it!

I dont mean to be harsh and I am interested in your concept! I will await the next installment to see how things pan out. :)

Thanks to every one! I know it is confusing and short but you told me just what I wanted to hear! If I do post the next part then I ...

Yep, this is just like the introduction to see how others react to it and for others to give me any suggestions.

thanks sooo much! Off to get my red pen and fix things! I really love it when people rip my stories to shreds. Yes, in this first section she has ...

I loved edward going "I MUST PROTECT HER" That was just stephenie meyer perfect! Great great great!

oh my gosh! thank you so much! Were confrencing with the teacher on these tomorrow and so I need all the help I can get to prepare for it!

Thank you for reviewing but, lets all keep in mind that this is only like the first page of this story. I may not even finish it. I enjoy starting ...

lol! Nice!!! I posted the next section, check it out!

thank you for the compliment, I will post the fourth installment today, but first one thing yes I tend to use books I admore as a crutch for my storys, ...

I edited it but I am keeping gal in the alley, I adore a good bit of cliche once and a while!

thank you for heavy nit-pickers! Thank you so much, I edited part three but it is early and I would only screw it up more so I shall edit it ...