TabbyGirl

This is well done. I really like the way it was organized... But I would have liked a bit more of an idea of what Adam was like before the ...

Ok, well, you already have a lot of reviews, but I saw chapt. 2 under recently posted, and thougt, "I'll check out the first chapter, see what this is exactly," ...

Alright, so I'll start where you started: The introduction poem. I found that really great. It met my two poem criteria: It sounded good as I read it, and it ...

I liked this. So, it didn't exactly reach into my heart and touch my soul or anything, but it was interesting... I find I like stories more that start with ...

Whoah, Socks, are you seriously a 14 year old guy?! Sorry, this just seems like a very... mature, and very... well, girly peice. Not girly, that's not the right word... ...

Well... see, my main issue here is that there is a whole lot of fighting... I just find reading about battles is really boring. Not that that means you shouldn't ...

OKay, let's go over the things you asked about first... 1) I noticed no spelling or grammar errors, but don't trust me in this department. I type everything I write ...

Well... uh... hehe... not what I was expecting... Okay, so, the begining actually seemed fine to me. There were just a couple quick nitpicks... She lay across his lap, her ...

I must tell you, after reading this I just sort of went like, "...whoah." I saw no one had reviewed it yet, and I decided I'd just check it out, ...

Very funny :D Maybe post this under nonfiction, it really can't count as a story... although it does make me imagine some interesting stories of people dating ninjas... oh, and ...

You know, this I really enjoyed... despite the pain expressed in the story. Honestly, I was confused during parts... like, I dunno... I just didn't really understand what was going ...

Awe! This is so... powerful, so real, so... I don't know. It's like, pure and true and makes me want to cry because if I could I know I would ...

Well, there really isn't anyting wrong with this story... ok, yeah, it does sound kind of cliche, but still, there isn't really anything technically wrong, it's just that this is ...

Well, this was pretty short, but interesting none the less... I suppose it was, like, a prologue? Just three purple caril , Kara thought brushed through the tall grass and ...

Wow... this was really good! I loved the atmosphere... I loved the writing, really, you did an excellent job. Now, there were a couple sentences I thought could use revision... ...