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Re: The Return of the White Flame 2 (an exerpt)
Tuh-wist! I like it! Again, I'll start with nitpicks... as if on cue there was a horrendous screech as metal ground against rack. Rack? I think you meant to say ...
Jun 27, 2011 -
Re: The Return of the White Flame 1 (an exerpt)
Leave the nitpicking to me! A grayed haired man drolled on. You could change this sentence up a couple of ways, but right now it doesn't sound right... I would ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: He Remembers
I liked the gist of this... it evoked some good emotions. He felt the tears make rivers down his face as it reflected the pain on his comrade's when they ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: The First Son - Prologue
Hi S. Mylin! heheh I'm Tabby, and... yeah, I'm here to review. I'll start with nitpicks and the like: All had been well until this night, when Eden, expectant mother ...
Jun 24, 2011 -
Re: Maggie: A Love Story (Prolouge)
First thing, and, I hate to sound naggish, but look, you can't just post a big block of words like this! It isn't even that long, dude, you could space ...
Jun 16, 2011 -
Re: CUBE: Inside the Tesseract, Chapter Three
Kafka, my dear! I believe this is the very first time that I've reviewed something of yours... I was up late, bored, there was nothing to watch on TV, and ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Little Tommy and the Red Coats Preface/Chapter 1
Good day X) Um... okay, well, I have to admit, the biggest issue I have is probably with "Elizabeth." I mean... take this, for example. “I can’t Elizabeth,” he whispered, ...
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: Visual Commentary
Cute XD I love where you came from, the overall idea was really different (in a good way!) I'd like to point out a couple of things Left Eye: [alone ...
Jun 11, 2011 -
Re: Meeting Again
....... Whoah. Okay, so, I this was the most recently posted thing on the front page. I clicked on it instinctively. Usually, things without titles frustrate me, so I didn't ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Jarred Heart
Hola XD 'kie dai, well, I like it, but, as ever, I have issues with it... Positives or negatives first? Meh, I'll do positives, they're in my head... One of ...
Jun 5, 2011 -
Re: Affairs of the Heart chapter 1
Yo, Des XD (I've always thought that's a cool nickname) Well, after reading this, (and Rach's review) I have to say, I agree with a lot of her points (I ...
May 29, 2011 -
Re: .
Howdy XD I must say... the writing was outstanding. I saw lots of awesome imagery, and descriptiveness and stuff. However... there are a couple of things I'd like to address... ...
May 28, 2011 -
Re: Come On, Sis!
Yo XD So, let's start on a positive: I really, honestly, truly like the message ^^ it was really sweet, and I could kind of identify with it........... Come on ...
May 27, 2011 -
Re: The Beast
I just... have to say... I
May 27, 2011 -
Re: Photographs
I have NEVER in my life reviewed lyrics. I rarely even review poetry, and I've always figure that lyrics are just too far out of my league (I'm more a ...
May 25, 2011
