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YYYEEEESSSSSS!!!!!!!! ANOTHER CHAPTER!!! I LOVE THIS FREAKING NOVEL!!!!! PLEASE KEEP WRITING!!!!:D

Thanks for the feedback. Gladly all of you told me about this before I turned it in to my teacher for my creative writing assignment. I'll either tweak this one ...

Yeah, I realized that. I'm thinking about getting rid of this piece. My friends say that poetry is my thing anyway so . . . any objections?

This poem is a lot better than some others I've seen about death. Probably the best I've seen. It seems like you had a tragic experience like this happen to ...

Like everyone else said, love it! You're an awesome writer so keep writing!

Thank you all for your comments and constructive critism! I will be changing the errors, but thank you for spending your time and reading over my work. I would like ...

I like the rhymem scheme and how you interperet that love doesn't usually last. You're very truthful about what you write and that's why I love your work. Keep writing!

I'm a book worm. I can get stuck in any book, and now I got stuck in this one. I can't wait for the next chapter! :D

I don't have much to say . . .

Thank you for your help! I started this awhile ago before I really knew how to write and so I just tweaked it a little. I had a feeling that ...

Thank you all for your constructive critism! I usually don't get a lot if you couldn't tell, because people are scared to tell me. They think I'll go over the ...

I like the rhyming scheme and the metophors. Great work and keep writing! :D

I like this poem. It really shows you know what it's like to have pain inside. Again, good poem and you have a gift to take what's inside and write ...

I love how you write this in second person. I don't usually come across work like this that I like. I like how you use memories to explain the circumstances ...

I love this story! I have choked on cigarette smoke before because I used to have family that smoked wildly, but this did describe what it's like being choked by ...