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Ms. Hallie is still tending to Ms. Patterson,” the doctor said as they boarded the helicopter. There are two doctors in this scene. You may want to consider telling the ...

Once upon a time in a small, tiny, miniscule, petite, insignificant town there was a small, tiny, miniscule, petite, insignificant pebble. The pebble was magical and glowed all the bright, ...

The shadows stood behind me - watching my every move while the light stood in front of me criticizing my face. The punctuation in this sentence is awkward and your ...

No, it was more beautiful than gold. Perhaps the king had ordered a special material, a mixture of gold and diamond maybe, and built his castle out of it. Whatever ...

Hey, I'm back. ^-^ Remember me? At this rate, I may stick around until the story's finished ;) Anyway, on to the review. He could, for that brief moment when ...

(I did not expect to see myself frequenting the Romance board this much.) The river moved through the forest like a vein winding through an arm. The colors contrasted each ...

Once upon a time, I believed there was more to life than social standing. This phrase irritates the living fire out of me. I think it's more of a personal ...

It was a mandatory course that took up most of an elf’s life and then we would use our training in the battlefield until we died or most likely killed. ...

Penguin is right, his style of speech just isn't suitable for a teenage. If he was a thirty year-old man, than perhaps. I personally didn't mind the tone, but I ...

I have one word to say, Father Grigori change the comma into a colon. How foolish it all is, you trust a person then, they turn on you This isn't ...

I notice that your character's personalities come across really well. That's always a good thing. In my opinion, that's the most interesting thing about this story. Also, I didn't find ...

Oh...my...god! Yeah, Dudette was right. It was very intense. I really couldn't find any problems with this piece. It was written well and the description was superb. I character's struggle ...

I liked this essay :) I haven't read Alice and Wonderland before, but this essay makes me want to read it. There sure seems to be a lot of symbolism ...

Awesome title, By the way :) The piece is written really well. I especially like the italicized thoughts. This scene conveys deep emotion, even though the story hasn't picked up ...

Purgatory, eh? You say it's a cliche? I dunno, sounds pretty cool to me. “Oh no,” she said when her eyes fell upon the mayor's corpse. “Gaunt, not again. I ...