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aaah!You remind me of my brother ConorR, he's on this site too. I think it is hillarious and don't worry, we all get a horrid review from Brad (shudders) sometime ...

I liked it! It was a good way of approaching a risky topic. Just a few things, I didn't like the way you kept saying fattening me with lies, the ...

Thank you very much! I will try and edit it soon! Charlotte

Does anyone like this? If you have any improvements just tell me! I need some advice on what to do with this story. Charlotte

Thank you! I replied to your welcome post in the welcome forum! Glad to see your getting used to yws already! Charlotte

Thank you Jules! You comment did make me happy! I don't usuallly write love poems but I wanted to try a sonnet. Thanks Charlotte Very funny signature!

I like the last two and the first three were hillarious. Someone should write a funny book of funny haikus. Weird, but whenever I read haikus the voice in my ...

Really cool poem. I liked the way you reversed hell being bright and crowded instead of being in the dark and alone I would change the last line to something ...

I like these two! “All history is wrong and need to be rewritten.” Glen Ames "A true author does not care about the reader.” Sean Pendr Very funny! Charlotte

Sorry! But we all know each other so, no harm done eh? *Laughs nervously* But I did comment on the story!

Thank you again for the comments, I have edited it once again. Its nice to hear what you all think of it. Charlotte

Hi everyone! I've edited it again now, so if you could just crit it, I'd be much obliged. Thank you in advance! Charlotte The Charcoal Queen of Darkness

Ok joseph, (see I spelt your name right!) I remember you at sam's halloween party 2006 as well? (I still have gypsy powers, so watch out!!!) Write something please, so ...

Thank you, Book worm 113. (sorry i don't know your name.

Cool poem. Liked the end part where you asked the reader what they thought. Definetly needs a new title. How about something to to with describing or life? love your ...