Swottielottie

I love this sad poem i 'm not sure what its about but then again i wasn't reading it prorperly charlotte xxxx

ooooh! I like this one! your style is cool keep on writing!!! review my poems please!!!! charlotte

So sad...But I like sad poems I think abortions are wrong too you really spoke from the heart writing that Sorry if it sounds corny! Charlotte xxx

I like the poem Nice use of metaphors On an ocean of unhappiness. From thunderous clouds of guilt and shame, Falls a relentless helplessness, I like that above bit Charlotte ...

thanks is the new one any better?

I agree with everyone else but I thought it was quite a good poem What exactly was the subjs=ect beacause I didn't really understand it it had a nice feel ...

Love the words and the flow I don't really understand what your talking about except death i think but I'm only 13 so you know.... great poem though just great

I love this poem it was really sad but cool at the same time Can u review my poem? its on the same section as this but uder is this ...

Thanks for the comments guys how is this version? I hope this is a little better Lilly white skin Dripping with blood Unmoving muscles Still as the dead one last ...