Swords

This is specially brilliant because of the symbolism. The parallel structure of the opening sentence and the closing line is so effective in telling us that he shouldn't be here, ...

You've done a great job highlighting the height of his nervousness - eagles instead of butterflies, sweating, elevated heart rate. However, "That is, if I actually try it", doesn't really ...

Doctor!! I just kept expecting him to whip out his sonic screwdriver and for the Tardis to appear :D I really want to know what they boy was going to ...

Your tone and diction is very consistent with the theme and I love it! The etymology included is very effective in making the piece seem based off actual biblical events. ...

Psychiatric patients are always intriguing :D. I like how she seems perfectly sound of mind in the morning- she even helps her mother out of the bathtub, but she was ...

I love how you've played on the suspense and adrenaline and left us wondering who/what 'they' are. That short abrupt phrase- 'dead wrong' - works well for emphasis on not ...