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Re: My Savior
THIS IS AMAZING!! I LOVE HOW YOU DESCRIBE EVERY THING THAT HAPPENED,ASHLEY IS AN AMAZING CHARACTER THAT YOU INVENTED!! THIS SENTENCE JUST CONFUSES ME: "And I know he knows. I ...
Jul 31, 2013 -
Re: My Window
LOVING THIS!!! :) BUT THIS SENTENCE HAD DRAIN MY EXCITEMENT: "Because when I can’t understand, I tend freeze." I TEND FREEZE? WHAT'S THAT? I THINK YOU MEANT "I TEND TO ...
Jul 31, 2013 -
Re: Fly
WELL THIS IS AMAZING!! BUT THIS SENTENCE I'M CONFUSED: "Dragonflies have short, thin wings with have an uneven center of gravity." WHAT'S WITH THE "thin wings with have" it should ...
Jul 31, 2013 -
Re: Smoke Filled Forest Eyes
i love this!! how the smoke in her eyes and all!! :) I wanted, desperately, to see her eyes one last time. that sentence,i think don't need to have comma's ...
Jul 31, 2013 -
Re: One Last Chance
OMG!! I LOVE THIS THIS IS AMAZING!! BUT ALSO IT NEEDS SOME DESCRIPTIONS:LIKE WHAT'S HIS NAMES?HOW DID THE LADY LOOK?WHAT DOES THE HOUSE LOOK? AND I LOVE HOW YOU DESCRIBE ...
Jul 31, 2013