SuzieCake

I enjoyed this. I felt as if I were actually there, like I did while reading the novels. But the only thing that confuses me is why would Alice tell ...

At first, I really thought I wasn't going to like it, but then I got to reading it and I couldn't stop. And now, I can't stop laughing. My parents ...

Her father stood at the side of the bed, and watched as his daughter suckle her mother’s breast. Change suckle to suckled. Her siblings sat at a table, smiling. At ...

She sighed a heavy sigh, and looked like she was ready to pass out. She gave a heavy sigh and looked like she was ready to pass out. I rolled ...

This was good, but again, I think it would be best if we not talk about the feelings we have for Matthew just yet. Maybe if we make him a ...

I think that Matthew, though it was a good idea to introduce him, should have probably been introduced at a possible later time. Maybe if you had found some way ...

This was great, but I must admit that I am midly confused. The reason being is your character says she doesn't understand human emotion though she is one, but then ...

I took his hand in mine, and felt him flinch at the frostiness. “Hello there, Peter,” I said, I’m going to kill you tonight. “My name’s Nina.” I flashed my ...

Sorry if this seems a little late since you posted this back in January and it's April and I'm just now reading it. ^_^;; I haven't been on in a ...