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That's disappointing to hear. What in particular do you feel isn't working?

I'm disappointed to hear the concept isn't original to you - the prompt my friend gave me ("a man wakes up from a coma and is recognised by everyone but ...

The satirical edge was absolutely intended - a lot of my writing recently seems to have adopted something similar. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks for the feedback!

Good call on the formal diction - now you've pointed it out, I agree that it's out of place. I will be sure to revise that. No real extended metaphor ...

I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's just a short story, I'm afraid, with no plans for a sequel. I have a few other projects I want to focus on next. ...

It's a shame she feels upset and angry, and I'm sure that's not what the reviewers intended. For what it's worth, going through a story with a red pen and ...

Hi there! I don't think there's anything unfair in this critique. Something to bear in mind: stories and poems are posted to YWS with the express intention of being pulled ...

No worries. I have to say, I'm half tempted to write a religious essay of my own. I've started a couple of times, but always end up scrapping it.

Good good. Feel free to message me when you post the next chapter.

A comma would be grammatically incorrect, so I vote you don't do that. :p Google 'comma splice' to get an idea of why it would be incorrect. I'd try to ...

Fairly certain I've posted some stuff worse than this on YWS. :p

My feelings are that this is a place to critique the poem, not to preach or debate the author's religious beliefs. If you want to debate, check out the Serious ...

My feelings are that this is a place to critique the poem, not to preach or debate the author's religious beliefs. If you want to debate, check out the Serious ...

Just jumping in here to say that poetry lines don't always have to start with capital letters. Technically, either approach is fine, although starting all lines with capitals is actually ...

Hi ulala8! Thanks for the feedback! Single quotation marks are grammatically viable, and I actually prefer them to double quotation marks for a couple of reasons. I'm glad you think ...