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Hello, Silenced. ^_^ First, some specific observations: My heart beat races with each step I take toward my final destination. Heartbeat. Yet with their admonition , one would think I’d ...

Hey there! As requested: Ally put the small blade back down onto the moth-eaten rug and held her hand aloft in the space between us. Good hook. I like it. ...

Hi Katharsis! Let’s have a look-see here. Ganan's joints bludgeoned him with a dull, aching sensation as he slipped out of the tub of hot, steamy water and into a ...

Yo Conrad. =) the near holy appearance of its adversaries The ‘near holy appearance’? Sounds very impressive as a concept, but … I can’t picture it. The phrase doesn’t conjure ...

Whew, sorry about the lateness of this review. Had exams and stuff. Anyways: A spectre in the sun’s glow. It shivers. A grey, unrelenting perversion upon the forest’s canopies. Soft, ...

Is me again. =) The moon, dazed, drops bitterly into its grave. I’m thinking this would be better without the word ‘dazed’. It doesn’t seem to add that much, and ...

'sup. 1) whether you like it, are interested and such, Yup. Write moar. 2) if you like the style, sentence structures etc. The dense, almost prose-poem style of writing I ...

All I can really think of is something written by Neil Gaiman. His books cross pop culture (what you're after) with high culture (what your teachers are after). You could ...

This isn't really much of a poem - it's more of a rant, just in stanza form. It's okay for your poetry to have a meaning/message, but here all you're ...

Hey there Thirst. =) I clicked on this topic on a coca-cola induced whimsy, and was captivated by your opening sentence. Those three short words - Who am I? - ...

Yo Jack. ^_^ Luckily, H is brother had bought him first-class tickets, and it was quiet and relaxing in the front of the plane. Unless Luke happens to be God, ...

The winter rolls into his cage, dry, picking at the flakes at his skin, I dunno - I might be missing something very obvious (I do that often) - but ...

Hi there NightMistress. ^_^ The entire first half of the conversation is just question after question after question. Vary it more, as it currently feels like we're being beat around ...

They were still now, ceasing there tormenting dance, there whispering that no one but myself seemed to hear. ‘there’ = ‘their.’ Remember: There - for places and locations. (Remember, it’s ...

‘fraid I don’t really have much to offer outside of what Clo has said. =( All I can really add is: watch your descriptions/metaphors, as here you described some things ...