Supermal

The story sounds as though you are rushing, typing it all out as fast as you can without any real thought to how it sounds. As you type, try reading ...

This is really romantic and sweet. You wrote it really beautifully. My friend and I both agree that it would make a really good ending to a story.

I'm sorry if the whole things with the first nations girls offended you. If it does sound like I'm trying to make First Nations sound really stupid or anything, I'll ...

Ya, I think if you had a truly good character then it would be a wonderful story :) It sounds terribly interesting.

It's wonderful! So sweet and romantic. It flows so wonderfully that it's almost like a poem. It's really good. I loved the last line!

It has good detail, I was able to picture everything in my head very easily, but it needs a little more substance... I don't know exactly what, but it just ...

Lol, hilarious! Well written, too. :D

Wonderful! The flow seemed a little off... The sentances and such, but the feel was perfect.

It has a lot of potential to become a good story and I can tell you could make it into one, but yes, it could use a bit more time. ...

Now for a summary of what I accidentally deleted... Seriously. I have a somewhat ironic tale. Years before the terrorists struck New York, my friend and I were sitting in ...

damit i just wrote two pages on this and accidentally deleted them. :evil: {The Silent Aviator} That must suck :? (couldn't get the quote to work)

I like it. The first two lines are really good, especially. They go really good together.

Yes, it could use a bit of fixing up in the grammar arena and it is a little rushed, but otherwise it was brilliant. Great writing and plot.

I loved the ending, it made me chuckle a bit. For a 10 year old, it really is good, and you'll only get better with experience :) Hope you get ...

I love these books! They're really good and I've read all 5 so far. My mother has also and she's even liked them. It's cool that D. J. MacHale actually ...