SuperWriter

Umm... All I can say is that you sound exactly like a few of my friends. Also, you should put more meaning into the words and maybe make it a ...

Hey! SuperWriter here! I liked the story very much, and being your first piece, it was truly very good! However, I did notice some things for critique. When Jane is ...

I like it! It's very descriptive and the beginning makes the reader interested in the rest of the story! But I think you should include more details about her life. ...