SunnyHeart27

So the above reviewers have helpfully dealt with all the punctuation mistakes, understandable and mild enough. So let me get into the parts of the story that I liked. It ...

Hey, this reminded me more of a song than a poem actually, because it was so emotive. You used language to create a really malleable atmosphere of sadness, I adored ...

I thought this was super enjoyable. A few small things that the other reviewers have mentioned are right and could be improved to create a work even more readable and ...

This is really interesting, because it's so short, but it inspires so much emotion. I don't think it could be improved, it's succinct and perfect as it is. Enjoyable, intriguing ...

Damn, your story made me cry on my laptop. Whoops. :P Seriously though, I have never been moved by a story to this extent before, and I'd like to thank ...

Wow, I like this. It felt so personal, I felt close to the protagonist. It had a really interesting point to make, and made it clearly. Description is something you ...

I really liked this. Sometimes we do need to express all the feelings we have for someone special (like he clearly is) and I think you expressed yours in a ...

This is really well-written, intriguing, has a lots of good technique. Things I enjoyed were: The metaphor, Mr. Grey, was well done. Sometimes these things turn out cliched or passe. ...

OMG That's hilarious! *tears of laughter* :L :L Dude, such a funny story xD Mind if I stalk your page for more LOL-arious stories?? :P Niiice work :)

That's a really, really good quality of writing. You began with a startling image which drew the reader in, well done on that. A very powerful beginning ^.^ The story ...

This was interesting :D It kept my interest, the whole way through, and as a reader I enjoyed it. One thing, there was alot of dialogue without much backup information, ...