Streamfrost

thanks for the review! i will definitely keep some of these in mind for the upcoming chapters!!! thank you!!

Yeah the italics thing is a good idea. I was worried about the sudden change of POV, and how people would react to it. Thanks for the input. I will ...

Thanks! Yeah I'll fix thise errors! Thanks so much for the support! I'll check out your stories too! Thank you guys!

Thank you! Now that I think about it, "there" instead of "here" sounds a lot better. And no, unfortunately I don't yet. :( But my band and I hope to ...

You have a great start. Now all you need is to work on is word choice. Adding some new, more interesting words that allow the reader to really feel the ...

I loved the rhyme scheme and the way the words flowed with a constant rhythym. The last line, however, should read "not till i die", rather than "not till I ...

I like how this starts. Perhaps you could add a little more to it though? It's short, but maybe that's how you want it to be. Maybe in order to ...

I really like this. It immediately captured my attention when I began reading it, which I and many other readers look for in writing. I enjoyed the fact that you ...

For those of you who don't know what the Seraphim refers to, the Seraphim are a hierarchy of angels commonly depicted as having flaming wings (and in some cases, four ...