StoryWeaver13

Pretty simple and some of the lines and comparisons are kind of cliche, but the twist at the end definately helped make it a little above-average. It is a cool ...

OK, pros and cons. Pros - Love where you're going with this! In general, the plot is ah-maz-ing. I'm not even a fan of romance, but this is sweet and ...

Chapter 1 - The Beginning Winter had rolled in sooner than usual in Connecticut , coating most of the city of West Haven in a blanket of thick fluffy white ...

This isn't too bad, but I can tell you're still learning. My suggestion would just be (for writing anything, poetry especially) to emphasize the emotional aspect of everything, so you ...

Adorable ending, but I would've liked if this was just a little longer. I'm not a fan of romances, but this one was very sweet. Honestly, I don't have much ...

So far, so good, just remember to watch yourself for any typos (you have a few) and such. Other than that, I would've liked this to be just a little ...

This is great. At first glance it looked kind of intimidating because of how long the lines were, and I figured they were too long to work, but you did ...

This was really good, and it had a smooth flow to it. The only thing really is that you do a lot of telling, and even though you do a ...

“I’m getting too old for this,” Finn grumbled into the carpet as a Salvador’s tongue ran across his cheek. Davie chuckled from his place on the coffee table. “You’re not ...

I agree with the first reviewer on the fact that this sounds like a song. Also, impressive how much you know about this! I think this wealth of knowledge was ...

I just think you need to expand on this, and maybe help us sympathize with you a little more. Right now the tone is just kind of stern and direct ...

Okay, right off I love your character's voice, and that's what keeps me reading. Another quick thing I noticed is that you don't always get your grammar in - remember ...

This was really dramatic, which normally I don't like because it feels too over-the-top, but this was still really good. You play the words well and string them together to ...

Warning: I might sound a lot meaner than I intend to. I'm sorry. :( Bear with me. OK, this was just kind of weak for a few reasons. First off, ...

My bag slung over my shoulder ; I slowed my pace down to a walk. Cars whizzed by me, and I felt like they were all watching me. Walking up ...