StoryWeaver13

This was good. Dark, but good. You had minor errors grammar-wise here and there (ignoring the southern slang, of course), but this was really the only issue I saw. The ...

Definitely interesting, I'm hooked into your story now. I think like most everybody I'm pretty tired of vampires by now, but your seems to be taking a unique turn already. ...

I thought this was really good. I loooved your second stanza, and the others were rock-solid too. The imagery seamed this together with a lot of articulance, so sadly I'm ...

Yo Skins, wazzup? Well strangely I remember the original, even though it was like a million years ago, and it was pretty parallel to this from what I remember. A ...

There's seriously been some awesome writing on this site lately. This was definitely not an exception to it. This was really, really cool. Grr, I hate short and pointless comments ...

Whoa! Curb-ball! Even with the little side-note warning thing at the beginning, which I totally forgot about while reading this. ;) So, my general impression was, "Wow, I can totally ...

What a cool concept for a poem! I love some of the images here. I felt like there were a couple of places that could've flowed a little better, or ...

There were certain aspects of this that were really nice, and certain aspects of this that I just wasn't a huge fan of. The overall concept is hard to make ...

Whoa, usually my below-squirrel-level attention span just can't get through something this long that's on a computer. But this totally hooked me in. I don't think there's much else that ...

I never saw the original version, but this is a pretty good start! I do have one problem though, and in my personal opinion it's a rather big one. On ...

I didn't feel like there was a point, per se, to this. But I did like it. Your character has an almost over-the-top happy-go-lucky attitude, and it'll probably rub some ...

Well I loved this personally. It's so dark and twisted, and I have a terrible enjoyment for things like this. There were grammar things here and there, but I really ...

Short! But good for its size. If you had any plans on developing this, definitely do, because adding back story and such this could be a really cool novel, or ...

This was a nice poem. (: I did have issues with the second stanza, though. I felt like it was sandwiched between two really solid stanzas, but fell flat in ...

Wow. I just...wow. At first, I wasn't really warming up to this poem. The beginning felt emotionally chilled and distant and overly-formal almost, for whatever reason, to a point where ...