Stephene

you were made for greater planes than those of my uncapitalized lines and stitched-up words, and for that i apologize. your dreams take such space, and i know that my ...

ok, i worked three hours on this , then my browser closed which erased everything , and i forgot the whole thing .... now its horrible. i tried my best ...

I personally thought that your poetic work was very interesting. I don't think i found any major mistakes but some punctuation once like in the third line, "Your cruel actions ...

The poetry was intense and i have to say that even i was lost somewhere in the level of vocabulary used. Some points didn't make any sense like, "Staking out ...

Truly amazing piece of work, i must say you were able to make the environment for your characters such that i could feel as if i am there! i think ...

Over all i think it was a very good poem as you were almost successful in trying to write what you were trying to write, though i personally thought that ...

i seriously laughed when i read this because i think it was personal experience that you wrote (no offence in anyway) i think your a good writer for your age ...

Hey retrodisc i too am new to this place so i am not that good at it still i feel like giving it a try too like royal seal pointed ...

Wonderful story, i don't know about there other readers but i truly loved it. apart minor spellings mistakes like cigarettes and buses and some apostrophes like I'm instead of im ...